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Evaluate the thesis statement: note whether the author’s thesis and overall representation of these particular articles are clearly stated. Make suggestions to help with the wording if you think it will help the author’s clarity.

2. Share any concerns you have about the accuracy of the author’s sources. You can also suggest other sources that would help the author to have the most comprehensive understanding of his or her particular topic.

3. Note whether the organization of the essay is effective. Suggest an alternate organizational strategy if you think one is needed or would be useful.

4. Note whether this short essay convinces you that the author has located sufficient materials to be knowledgeable about his or her topic for the final essay and, therefore, is ready to proceed to taking a stand on the issue, which is our next step in the research process.

5. Offer corrections to errors in in-text citations and references. We want to have a discussion about how to correctly format citations and references so that this aspect of writing is also made clear in the process of writing.

Underage Drinking: The argument from both Sides

Joseph Toole

09 Aug 2013

ENG 2001 S04

Instructor: Gary Henry

Lowering the drinking age limit will decrease binge drinking, no, keeping the drinking age higher has saved lives. This argument to either lower the age or keep it the same has been in place for 25 years and is showing no signs of improvement. Both sides of this argument present good views that could have you on either side. This essay goes through the articles that were researched and goes over all views from both side of the argument.

After going through the pros and cons of underage drinking I have pulled out some very important views and very interesting points on both sides of the argument that will hopefully be useful for the final essay. The first article I read up on was from the Los Angeles Times, it is called, Pro/Con: Should Legal Drinking Age be Lowered to 18? This article along with a few more, will be to main articles used in my final essay for my argument. Everyone knows that people under 21 consume alcohol. They can witness it first hand or see it in pictures and posts on their facebook page. Many of these underage drinkers do not know their drinking limit and causes alcohol poisoning for those who consume too much and eventually becomes fatal (Ogilvie.J, 2011). “Some experts say the solution is to lower the legal drinking age to 18″ (Ogilvie.J, 2011). According to Dr. David J. Hanson, a sociologist who works at State University of New York at Potsdam has been studying alcohol and drinking for 40 years. He says,” What we’re doing now to prevent underage drinking isn’t working; it’s time to try something else” (Ogilvie.J, 2011). Looking at the same article, I have moved to the other side of the argument of whether or not the age limit should be changed or stay the same. “Keeping the drinking age at 21 has saved lives, and there’s no reason to fix what isn’t broken”(Ogilvie.J, 2011). According to James C. Fell, a senior program director at the Alcohol, Policy and Safety Research Center of the Pacific Institute for Research & Evaluation, “Binge Drinking among eighth, 10th and 12th graders has been steadily going down since age was raised to 21″(Ogilvie.J, 2011). He also goes on saying that in colleges, there has not been much progress, then states, “but lowering the drinking age is not the answer” (Ogilvie.J, 2011).

The American Journal of Public put out an article called, “Will Increasing Alcohol Availability by Lowering the Minimum Legal Drinking Age Decrease Drinking and Related Consequences among Youths”. It was written by Henry Wechsler and Toben Nelson. This article does present some similar ideas as the one above. However, this article is geared toward keeping the drinking age limit at 21. There have been many efforts by many organizations to try and lower the drinking age limit to 18. One in particular is the Amethyst Initiative which has been signed by many University and College presidents to try and lower the drinking limit to 18. “This policy change is a central feature of a campaign its organizers contend will help young adults aged 18 to 20 years make healthy decisions about alcohol and lead to reductions in drinking and its negative effects” (Wechsler and Nelson, 2010). There are a lot of repercussions if this were to be passed. In order for this to work, it requires a lot of consideration and participation from the public health community. Looking at the negatives currently with alcohol consumption, it is the third leading actual cause of death in the United States, it contributes to unintentional injuries and is the leading cause of death in our youth and young adults and accounts for 75,00 deaths in the United States Annually. It contributes to many adverse and social consequences such as physical and sexual assault, unintended pregnancy, sexually transmitted infection, violence, vandalism, crime, overdose, other substance use and high risk behavior and contributes to heavy burden of social and health costs(Wechsler and Nelson, 2010). This article provides many statistics and crucial information that will prove to be very useful in my final essay.

The Wall Street Journal, “Old enough to Fight, Old Enough to Drink”, article by Glenn Harlan Reynolds, is article that is for lowering the age limit. The title screams its position on the matter. “The Old enough to fight, old enough to drink, argument has force. In fact, 18 year olds in America are old enough to do pretty much everything except drink. Along with joining the military, 18 year olds can vote, marry, sign contracts, and even take on crippling lifetime burden of student loan debt in pursuit of an education that may never land them a job. Yet we face the absurd phenomenon of colleges encouraging students to go onto six figure debt which can be discharged in bankruptcy but forbidding them to drink on campus because they’re deemed mature to appreciate the risks” (Reynolds. G, 2011). This is what his argument is based around along with using the military and the Amethyst Initiative that was explained in the previous article.

After going through “Lowering the Drinking Age Won’t Curb Binge Drinking: Study”, from Asian News International, I was a little surprised. This article is actually about what has taken place in the United States. Richard A. Scribner, of Louisiana State University School of Public Health, was a researcher for a new study that incorporated using a mathematical model to show the effects that would come from lowering the age limit and how it would curb binge drinking. This article explains the reasoning behind the new study. After reading through it and seeing the results, this article will be used in the argument for those who are against lowering the argument.

The last couple of articles that I read through are of recent incidences where alcohol was involved causing things like rape, suicide and alcohol poisoning which lead to a college freshman’s death. These articles will be used as examples of the repercussions of underage drinking at the current day and age. The first article from the Los Angeles Times called “Drunkenness isn’t Consent”, by Sandy Banks, is about two high school football stars that raped a 16 year old girl at a party and the consequences they face now with the law. Another article from the New York Times called “Arrests in a Freshman’s Drinking Death Reflect a Tougher Approach”, by Steven Yaccino, is about a 19 year college freshman who died during a fraternity initiation where drinking was involved, caused his death. This is another article of the repercussions of underage drinking and what happens to those involved. Whether you are the one drinking or the one forcing those to drink, consequences will follow. The last article from the Los Angeles Times is called, “The whole School knows”, and it is written by Kate Mather. The article is about a young girl who was raped by three teenage boys at a party and the school she went found out about what happened to her and began to make fun of her and she ended up committing suicide. The three boys have been charged with sexual assault. Again this is another article that shows what happens with underage drinking and the consequences that follow with it.

In conclusion, both sides of this argument present excellent information and some very interesting views. It is tough to argue one side especially after reading these articles. If you choose whether to lower the age, there are going to be repercussions. If you keep the age where it is, we are still seeing problems and more controversial arguments. Which side presents the best argument?

References

Asian News International (2010). Lowering the Drinking Age Won’t Curb Binge Drinking: Study. Retrieved From:

http://sks.sirs.com.southuniversity.libproxy.edmc.edu/cgi-bin/hst-article-display?id=SSTHPROXY-0-4206&artno=0000311705&type=ART&shfilter=U&key=Teenagers%2C%20Alcohol%20use&title=Lowering%20the%20Drinking%20Age%20Won%27t%20Curb%20Binge%20Drinking%3A%20Study&res=Y&ren=N&gov=N&lnk=N&ic=N

Pauline J.O. (2011). Los Angeles Times: Pro/Con: Should Legal Drinking Age Be Lowered to 18? Retrieved From :<

http://sks.sirs.com.southuniversity.libproxy.edmc.edu/cgi-bin/hst-article-display?id=SSTHPROXY-0-4206&artno=0000314845&type=ART

Reynolds G.H. (2011). Wall Street Journal: Old Enough to Fight, Old Enough to Drink. Retrieved From :<

http://sks.sirs.com.southuniversity.libproxy.edmc.edu/cgi-bin/hst-article-display?id=SSTHPROXY-0-4206&artno=0000313239&type=ART

McCardell J. (2009). Atlantic Monthly: Teach Drinking. Retrieved From :<

http://sks.sirs.com.southuniversity.libproxy.edmc.edu/cgi-bin/hst-article-display?id=SSTHPROXY-0-4206&artno=0000296730&type=ART

Yaccino S. (2012). New York Times: Arrests in a Freshman’s Drinking Death Reflect a Tougher Approach. Retrieved From:<

http://sks.sirs.com.southuniversity.libproxy.edmc.edu/cgi-bin/hst-article-display?id=SSTHPROXY-0-4206&artno=0000348403&type=ART&shfilter=U&key=Teenagers%2C%20Alcohol%20use&title=Arrests%20in%20a%20Freshman%27s%20Drinking%20Death%20Reflect%20a%20Tougher%20Approach&res=Y&ren=N&gov=N&lnk=N&ic=N

Banks S. (2013). New York Times: Drunkenness Isn’t Consent. Retrieved From:<

http://sks.sirs.com.southuniversity.libproxy.edmc.edu/cgi-bin/hst-article-display?id=SSTHPROXY-0-4206&artno=0000349613&type=ART&shfilter=U&key=Teenagers%2C%20Alcohol%20use&title=Drunkenness%20Isn%27t%20Consent&res=Y&ren=N&gov=N&lnk=N&ic=N

Mather K. (2013). Los Angeles Times: ‘The Whole School Knows’. Retrieved From:<

http://sks.sirs.com.southuniversity.libproxy.edmc.edu/cgi-bin/hst-article-display?id=SSTHPROXY-0-4206&artno=0000350752&type=ART&shfilter=U&key=Teenagers%2C%20Alcohol%20use&title=%27The%20Whole%20School%20Knows%27&res=Y&ren=N&gov=N&lnk=N&ic=N

Wechsler H. and Nelson T. (2010). American Journal of Public Health: Will Increasing Alcohol Availability by Lowering the Minimum Legal Drinking Age Decrease Drinking and Related Consequences Among Youths? Retrieved from:<

http://sks.sirs.com.southuniversity.libproxy.edmc.edu/cgi-bin/hst-article-display?id=SSTHPROXY-0-4206&artno=0000306222&type=ART&shfilter=U&key=Teenagers%2C%20Alcohol%20use&title=Will%20Increasing%20Alcohol%20Availability%20by%20Lowering%20the%20Minimum%20Legal%2E%2E%2E&res=Y&ren=N&gov=N&lnk=N&ic=N

Running head: BIBLIOGRAPHIC ESSAY 1

Bibliographic Essay: Welfare drug Testing

Jessica Carter

South University Online

Bibliographic Essay: Welfare Drug Testing

There are many differing viewpoints when it comes to whether or not drug tests should be required before a person receives any kind of government assistance, like Temporary Assistance for Needy Families (TANF), food stamps, and Medicaid. Some say there should be drug tests because tax dollars shouldn’t be spent on drugs and drug users, while other says it is a waste of even more taxpayer money. While I have articles that talk about each side, I also have some that are neutral and talk about both sides.

The article No Savings are found from Welfare Drug Tests (Alvarez, 2012) is against drug testing welfare applicants. In Florida they have already implemented drug testing, thinking it would save money and stop people from doing drugs, unfortunately it didn’t. It had even resulted in lawsuits claiming the drug tests are unconstitutional and violate the fourth amendment. During the four months the drug testing occurred, only 2.6% of applicants failed, costing the state more money than would have been paid out for welfare.

The article New Drug Tests Target the Poor (Khalek, 2009) is also against drug testing. The article claims that the drug tests are an indignity. Pretty soon, all 50 states will have to drug test before an applicant can receive TANF, which would require the applicants to pay for the drug test themselves. This doesn’t make sense because they obviously need help with money; they don’t have the money to spare even if they pass and get it back. Basically, the article is saying that the drug tests are nothing but people being stereotypical.

The article Drug Tests for Welfare Applicants Produce Less than Meets the Eye (USA Today, 2012) is against drug testing as well. It talks about the failure of the mandatory drug testing in states that have started requiring it. Money hasn’t been saved like it was supposed to be and there haven’t been many people who failed the test. Although one-third didn’t even take the test, “there’s no telling how many feared failing the test and how many couldn’t afford the fee. The cost is repaid if the test is passed, but welfare applicants might struggle to muster $30.” (Khalek, 2012, para. 7)

The article No Drug Test, No Welfare (Yee, 2012) is for drug testing. According to Yee, “receiving a public benefit is a privilege, not a right” (2012, para. 1) The article basically says that giving drug users welfare is condoning illegal behavior, and that if people have to be drug tested for a job, then so should people receiving government assistance. Yee has very strong feelings about this topic and it shows in her article.

The article Welfare/ Drug Test Bill Needs Further Study (Evansville Courier and Press, 2013) seems to be neutral. It talks about how Indiana tried implementing the drug testing, but the bill failed because no one could agree on the specifics for a final version. The major point of the article is that their needs to be more study done on this issue before doing something about it.

The article Welfare Drug Test Results Trickle in; Township Numbers High (Higgins, 2013) is also a neutral article. According to this article, 13% of 50 drug tests came back positive for various drugs, and apparently some people have claimed they wouldn’t take the test because they knew they would fail. On the other hand, the article also says that it’s hard to get data about how effective the program will be, so there’s no way to know if it’s effective or not.

The article Welfare Drug Testing to High Court? (Kam, 2013) is a neutral article as well. It talks about a lawsuit Governor Rick Scott is trying to win, but the court he went to first says there’s no evidence for a need for the law to drug test welfare recipients. Kayanyan, the ACLU’s head lawyer, claims that Rick Scott is being stereotypical and there is no evidence welfare recipients are more likely to do drugs. (Kam, 2013, para. 12) The main purpose of the article is to give both sides of the debate and inform readers of the reasoning behind each.

The article $26,000 Spent to Check Welfare Seekers for Drugs (McKitrick, 2013) is another neutral article. The article is about the Substance Abuse Subtle Screening Inventory (SASSI) test. The test ranks its takers and those who test as high have to submit to a drug test. The main point of the article is to give information on the SASSI test like its success rate and cost, while also talking about the number of people who failed the test (only nine), and the fact that that cost the state $26,000.

As you can see, I have many differing viewpoints on the topic of drug testing welfare applicants. Three articles are against drug testing, one is for it, and the remaining four are neutral. I think this wide variety of information will help my final essay because I will be looking at all sides. I will provide all of the information I have found and give my opinion instead of shying away from articles that challenge my opinion.

References

Alvarez, L. (April 18, 2012). No savings are found from welfare drug tests. New York Times. Retrieved from

http://sks.sirs.com.xy4gz9ms3x.useaccesscontrol.com/cgi-bin/hst-article-display?id=SSERSOL-0-8492&artno=0000340649&type=ART&shfilter=U&key=&title=No%20Savings%20Are%20Found%20from%20Welfare%20Drug%20Tests&res=Y&ren=Y&gov=Y&lnk=Y&ic=Y

Evansville Courier and Press. (May 6, 2013). Welfare/ Drug test bill needs further study. Retrieved from

http://elibrary.bigchalk.com.southuniversity.libproxy.edmc.edu/elibweb/elib/do/document?set=search&dictionaryClick=&secondaryNav=&groupid=1&requestid=lib_standard&resultid=8&edition=&ts=84A91B230E26C7F90B14FDE16B14E8A7_1375811720302&start=1&publicationId=&urn=urn%3Abigchalk%3AUS%3BBCLib%3Bdocument%3B216093758

Higgins, J. (February 3, 2013). Welfare drug test results trickle in; Township numbers high. Evansville Courier and Press. Retrieved from

http://elibrary.bigchalk.com.southuniversity.libproxy.edmc.edu/elibweb/elib/do/document?set=search&dictionaryClick=&secondaryNav=&groupid=1&requestid=lib_standard&resultid=2&edition=&ts=DC164271670463E3925BBBD3B5A9B3EA_1375554605351&start=1&publicationId=&urn=urn%3Abigchalk%3AUS%3BBCLib%3Bdocument%3B212914750

Kam, D. (February 27, 2013). Welfare drug testing to high court?. Palm Beach Post. Retrieved from

http://sks.sirs.com.xy4gz9ms3x.useaccesscontrol.com/cgi-bin/hst-article-display?id=SSERSOL-0-8492&artno=0000350214&type=ART&shfilter=U&key=&title=Welfare%20Drug%20Testing%20to%20High%20Court%3F&res=Y&ren=Y&gov=Y&lnk=Y&ic=Y

Khalek, R. (September, 2009). New drug tests target the poor. In These Times. Retrieved from

http://sks.sirs.com.xy4gz9ms3x.useaccesscontrol.com/cgi-bin/hst-article-display?id=SSERSOL-0-8492&artno=0000317157&type=ART&shfilter=U&key=&title=New%20Drug%20Tests%20Target%20the%20Poor&res=Y&ren=Y&gov=Y&lnk=Y&ic=Y

McKitrick, C. (July 11, 2013). $26,000 spent to check welfare seekers for drugs. The Salt Lake Tribune. Retrieved from

http://elibrary.bigchalk.com.southuniversity.libproxy.edmc.edu/elibweb/elib/do/document?set=search&dictionaryClick=&secondaryNav=&groupid=1&requestid=lib_standard&resultid=21&edition=&ts=DC164271670463E3925BBBD3B5A9B3EA_1375554605351&start=1&publicationId=&urn=urn%3Abigchalk%3AUS%3BBCLib%3Bdocument%3B217867883

USA Today. (March 19, 2012). Drug tests for welfare applicants produce less than meets the eye. Retrieved from

http://sks.sirs.com.xy4gz9ms3x.useaccesscontrol.com/cgi-bin/hst-article-display?id=SSERSOL-0-8492&artno=0000340322&type=ART&shfilter=U&key=&title=Drug%20Tests%20for%20Welfare%20Applicants%20Produce%20Less%20Than%20Meets%20the%20Eye&res=Y&ren=Y&gov=Y&lnk=Y&ic=Y

Yee, K. (March 19, 2012). No drug test, no welfare. USA Today. Retrieved from

http://search.proquest.com.southuniversity.libproxy.edmc.edu/docview/928954333/fulltext?accountid=13931

1. Evaluate the thesis statement: note whether the author’s thesis and overall representation of these particular articles are clearly stated. Make suggestions to help with the wording if you think it will help the author’s clarity.

Hazel, you have a great thesis statement, and you work in mentioning your articles nicely. Great job!

Did you use the same SUO sources we found last week A couple of them don’t look that way. They all look like they would be accurate though because they were either from the SUO library or from a .edu website, and they are all timely.

3. Note whether the organization of the essay is effective. Suggest an alternate organizational strategy if you think one is needed or would be useful.

Your organization is wonderful. You start with the nature side of the debate, followed by the nurture side, then followed by articles that are sort of neutral. This is a great way to go over the information from your sources because you’re not jumping around all over the place.

I believe that you have found sufficient material to be knowledgeable about your topic. You look at both sides of the debate and have very interesting information. I think you’re ready to take a stand on the issue and continue to the next step of the process.

Regarding your in text citations, I noticed there were a couple of places where you included a quote, but you didn’t address the author or the year. Remember when including quotes to end it with (author, year) to prevent yourself from plagiarizing.

Regarding your references, I believe you have done them correctly. Great job! I always forget to do the hanging indent. Hopefully, I’ll remember for my final draft.

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