Revise a persuasive essay.

revise the garmmar, and the add and edit some suppurting example.

keep the total words as 750

Wenlan luo

Date 201

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/9/17

EN101-professor Copeland

Persuasive essay 2

Some people believe that everyone should be vegetarian

The vegetarians has a long history, and the earliest record of them is come from Greece and India. At first the vegetarian was just among the Buddhism and Jainism. Vegetarianism is only relying on cereals, legumes, nuts, seeds, vegetables and fruits in order to survive, and some do not eat dairy products and eggs diet. Some people believe that everyone should be vegetarian nowadays. However, I feel it is too idealize. In my opinion, I disagree with it, because vegetarians easy to lack of protein, the population of the animal will uncontrolled and will bring new disease, and we cannot the broken the culture of the some nationality.

Firstly, protein is the most important source of nutrition that humans need to survive from day to day, because human cannot make protein by themselves, therefore we need to get it from the food. Legumes, nuts and seeds have the proteins, but meat always is the best source for the protein, because it contain the enough protein. However, vegetarian did not eat meat at all. For adults, it will decreased immunity, and anemia. For the children, it will lead to growth stagnation, anemia, the development of metal is poor, and have a poor vision. Therefore, lack of the protein is dangerous to our health.

Secondly, when we all become to a vegetarian, we will eat vegetable every day. Some vegetarian always said that vegetarian food can help us to prevent and decrease the possibility of a lot of diseases such as hypertension, heart disease, cancer, diabetes and obesity. If no one will eat meat which means there will be no more animal killed by human. Therefore, there are will be to much animal live in our world, the population of the animal will uncontrolled. Animal may will not have enough space for live, they may try to expand their manor. When animal try to expand their manor, it may bring some negative effect to human. For example, some animal who is aggressively, it will attack children or human, when this happened, people have to kill those animal for protect themselves. Moreover, when there are too many animal live in our world, it also may bring many new disease. It will make human into a new dangerous situation. So become a vegetarian did not help us far away from the disease, it also may bring us to face to some new diseases.

Finally, there are some nationality have to live relying on the meat. For example, in Tibet, people who live in the plateau section. They need to eat meat to keep them feel warm. Especially is the mutton, mutton is the main food for them, because mutton can bring enough energy and let them feel warm. If they stop to eat mutton, they cannot resist cold anymore, they may die easily. In addition, most people who live in the plateau section is poor, therefore they do not have enough money to buy the heating conditional or others to keep them warm. Furthermore, not only because of the place where they lived, also because of the culture of those nationality, they use mutton to celebrate their festive, or commemorate to something. Therefore, it is hard to broken their culture. If we broke culture, we may also lose a part of the history.

In conclusion, it is unnecessary let everyone to be a vegetarian, because we need proteins. The population of the animal need to be in controlled and we cannot broken the culture of the nationality. If you want it and you can, and then you can be a vegetarian. If you do not want to be vegetarian, just keep stay on your way, because there is nothing wrong with you. For me, I do not want to be a vegetarian, because I like eat food and meat, there taste delicious, and I am very health now.

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