ENG 1030

from the writing shots powerpoint professor wants us to write 3 of them in the story part. 

the travel memoir word document is the instructions of how she wants the paper looks like . 

continue the Chicago trip part and correct the grammar issues and add things where you think it’s not completed. 

Due in one hour. 

Writing Shots

Bringing your work to life

Writing Shots
Action shots
Snap shots
Dialogue shots
Thought shots

Action Shots
Action shots add drama to a scene
Matt dropped to the ground next to the flailing animal, still uselessly flapping its one good wing.
The thief sprinted off into the distance, jumped over the fence, flew through the air, and landed on the other side.
At the last second, the bus driver swerved wildly to avoid smashing into the other car.

Snap Shot
Snap shots highlight sensory details.
Snap shots are concrete details that take the reader to the place that the author is describing.
I peel the backs of my exposed thighs off the stiff brown seat for the hundredth time. I block out the shrill, giggling girls sitting behind me and press my cheek against the cool glass. I imagine the soccer team must have taken this bus to their game last night because the whole bus still stinks of wet, sweaty shin guards and sugary, sticky Gatorade spilled on the floor.

Dialogue Shots
Dialogue Shots add conversation to a scene in which characters reveal a conflict, further the plot, or reveal their personality. The dialogue must add to the story.
Dialogue shots are places in the writing where the characters speak in their own language.
Lindsey and Chelsea were really excited about the concert. Lindsey said she couldn’t wait, and Chelsea agreed that it would be fun.
“I can’t believe it’s here! I’ve been waiting for this concert for weeks,” Lindsay shouted from her room as she was getting dressed.
“I know! It’s going to be a blast!” exclaimed Chelsea, while she patiently waited for Lindsay to finish getting ready.

Thought Shots
Thought shots take place inside of the author’s mind.
Thought shots are places in the writing where the author tells inner thoughts, evaluations, or opinions, or responses.

Thought Shots
Flashback – a character thinks back about something that has already happened
“He remembered the first time he saw the snow.”
Flash-forward – a character thinks about what is going to happen or what might happen in the future
“She thought about going to the new school. What would it be like? Would she have friends?”
Internal Monologue – a character thinks about what they are experiencing or feeling at the moment
“He thought about what the teacher had just said. His mind raced, but he didn’t know the answer. Why did she call on him? What would the other kids think if he didn’t give a correct answer?”

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ENG – 1030

25 January 2018

Life Changing Experience

I born with a traveler family. My dad used to travel a lot because of his job. From a young age I had the opportunity to travel and see the world and experience different cultures, but this time it was so different. Studying abroad in

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merica without my family was the hardest decision that I have ever made, but it was so important for me and for my future. After 5 months of thinking I took my decision and started to read about the cities and the universities in America. I read too many articles about Dayton Ohio, and I saw many international students suggest this city for other international students. Some of the reasons that made me chose this city from the other cities were the location and the affordability. I won’t lie, at that time I was so afraid because in my imagination, America is a very dangerous country like what I used to see in Action movies. Which I realized once I came here that it is not the same of the reality. I prepared to leave with all enthusiasm and energy. After a very long flight that I have ever taken, I arrived to Dayton Ohio for the first time in my life. I was so excited to get out of the airport to see the great skyscrapers, and the crowds of many people from all over the world that I have been imagining all the flights time. Once I put my feet outside I saw nothing from what I have been imagining. I was shocked by the quietness of this city, I always thought of all America cities as big cities such as New York and Chicago.

My mind is full of memories of the first day of my classes. The first thing that always came into my mind is a misunderstanding. While I was walking through the doors, a girl opened the door and stopped. The first thing that came into my mind that she was waiting for someone, but the truth was that she opened the door for me because I was in front of her. When I understood what she meant by her movement, I felt very ashamed.

Talking about my first trip in USA was 3 days in Chicago. I went to the Wills Towers to experience the view from 103 floors up. When I arrived to 103 floor,

Due to the diversity in LEAP classes, I felt that I traveled not only to USA, but around the world because of my classmates sharing cultures with others. With all the differences between us, all of us were proactive in helping each other. Every night I write down the things that impressed me in this culture. Every day I am trying to change my self to the best by taking the good things from this culture.

Going back to my home country after one year in USA, I was so excited to see my family and my new niece, but a lot have changed in me. I was struggling with the wide differences between the two cultures, but I was able to manage it within the time.

One thing that I notice is that American movies effected my reputation before I come to USA. I used to watch a lot of criminal TV shows which also affect my thinking about the safety of living in USA. Misunderstanding between my culture and other cultures was a result of lack of education or knowledge of the other culture. Within the time I see that I was able to adjust my culture to American culture so I can nicely fit between them.

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TravelMemoir

2-3 pages

MLA formatting (Purdue OWL)

Overview

You will write a memoir telling a story from your own life. The story that you choose must be centered around travel of some sort. Choose an experience that has been particularly influential in your life. There are many ways you can approach this topic:

– A trip abroad for the first time

– Returning to a place you visited as a child and finding it has changed, or you have changed

– Visiting a neighboring community for the first time and finding it shockingly different than your own community

– An impactful trip with school

Narrative AND Analysis

Your memoir should be made up of two components: a narrative and analysis. These two pieces can be interwoven or done in two separate chunks. Your memoir must narrate from your own firsthand experience traveling and discuss why it is so important to you using descriptive details, dialogue you recall from the trip, and your own commentary that support your analysis of the experience.

Travel Memoir Rubric	Excellent	Good	Fair	Poor/Missing
Final draft 2-3 pages (5)
Contains an engaging, coherent narrative (25)
Employs at least 3 of the writing shots (20)
Explains the importance of the trip (15)
Analyzes specific details and their impact (10)
MUGS (mechanics, usage, grammar, spelling) (10)

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