Paper Title: A Worn Path No. of Pages: two and a half page draft (excluding the title and references page) Paper Style: APA Paper Type: Other Taken English? Yes English as Second Language? No Feedback Areas: Focus/Thesis Statement, Grammar & Mechanics Paper Goals: This paper is an Literary Analysis. It needs a working thesis an introduction, at least three body paragraphs, and a conclusion.Avoid any use of the first person.
Hello Kaleena , Thank you for submitting your assignment to the Learning Services Writing Center. My name is Rita, and I appreciated the opportunity to review your paper.
You have used examples and specific details with quotations to develop the paper. Your paragraphs give answers to some of the prompt’s suggested questions. You have made an effort to use effective language. The organization of your paper shows support for your main ideas.
As a basis for comparison, a suggested model thesis for this story is as follows:
The story’s setting–Christmas, dangerous woods, and the paved city–illustrates the social challenges and hypocrisy Phoenix must face.
Supporting points for sample thesis:
1. Two characters show Phoenix charity but also seem hostile/judgmental, suggesting that their intentions are not entirely charitable.
2. Phoenix is familiar with the settings (perhaps more at home in the woods) but also uses different survival skills for their different challenges and people.
3. These challenges reflect the society Phoenix has had to adapt to, which includes potentially dangerous white men and judgmental institutional figures.
Use this model as a guide to how a thesis statement for a literary analysis connects with the topic sentences of the body paragraphs. As you develop yours, also, tighten the direct connection of body paragraphs to the thesis statement with their topic sentences and their final sentences to help unify the paper.
APA format and Grammar and Mechanics: There are some suggestions about proofing and mechanics as well as APA format and in-text citations. Links to more information are also given. Note that we have not edited or proofread the entire draft for minor errors. Additionally, for more help with your grammar and punctuation, please use the Grammarly software which is available under “Writing Center” in your classroom.
As always, feel free to join a Live Tutoring Session with a tutor to receive immediate feedback on any additional questions you may have, including any questions you may have on the review of this paper. Keep up the good work, and thanks for using the Learning Services Writing Center! page 1 / 6 Proofed Paper: ntp193390 – Tue Feb 28 9:41:25 EST 2017 Please note that on the title page, your page header/running head should look like this: Running head: TITLE OF YOUR PAPER This looks good, but everything is double spaced for APA. page 2 / 6 Proofed Paper: ntp193390 – Tue Feb 28 9:41:25 EST 2017 Pages after the title page should have a running head that looks like this: TITLE OF YOUR PAPER Can you be more clear about the connections of this last sentence?In what way? For this, the first page of text, you begin with your introduction; however, first, you repeat the title of the paper and center it. The word “Introduction” is not used as a heading.
The introduction is written in a “funnel fashion,” moving from broad to narrow as it describes your topic.
Try to simplify your sentence structure. You may want to start a new sentence with the idea underlined. Is falling in the ditch an obstacle? Is there a better word for it?
To properly cite, add quotation marks around sentences that are word-for-word from a source and add an in-text citation. For example: “Quote in quotation marks” (Author’sLastName, Year, p.#). This working thesis should tell your reader the purpose and overall argument of your paper. In your body paragraphs, you will support your claims about the significance of the story through your analysis of the literary elements in that story.
The thesis statement becomes a road map for the body paragraphs with each paragraph developing one aspect of your main idea. page 3 / 6 Proofed Paper: ntp193390 – Tue Feb 28 9:41:25 EST 2017 How are you connecting the main idea of this paragraph to your thesis statement? How is this related to her struggle with the setting?
Just make sure that your thesis statement provides a clear representation of the subtopics that you discuss in your body paragraphs and that your conclusion wraps up your main ideas without introducing any new information.
You are using good quotes from the story. page 4 / 6 Proofed Paper: ntp193390 – Tue Feb 28 9:41:25 EST 2017 You will need a conclusion for this paper. As you write it, consider the following questions:
If my readers were to only read my conclusion, would they comprehend the message of the paper?
Have I fully summarized my ideas?
Is the importance or relevance of the issue emphasized?
Have I connected all my main ideas to the thesis statement? See this link for conclusions and introductions:
https://awc.ashford.edu/essay-dev-introductions-and-conclusions.html When you conclude your paragraph, you want to draw together the information you have presented to elaborate your main idea. To do that, you summarize the points made, repeat words from the topic sentence, and use linking words like therefore, thus, and in summary to tie the paragraph back to the thesis. page 5 / 6 Proofed Paper: ntp193390 – Tue Feb 28 9:41:25 EST 2017 TITLE OF YOUR PAPER Note that each page including this one needs proper headings left and right. Everything is double spaced for APA with no extra spaces from headings to title or title to citation or between citations Your citations are not numbered. Check format for citations at this link:
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