College Comp

This week’s project is your first version of the essay component of your final project. You will present your big idea in a persuasive and research supported manner and include your revised thesis statement. The style of the essay should be appropriate to an academic audience: avoid slang and stay in third person, and use the proper APA citation and formatting style.

For this project, review the feedback you received for the Units 2 and 4 projects as well as the Invention Lab comments relating to the ideas, plans, and prewriting exercises you have completed so far. Expand these ideas into a first draft. You do not have to implement all of the comments from your instructor or classmates, but you should pay attention to them and follow the advice you feel will help build a strong paper.

Your draft must be at least three to five pages long
(not including the title page and references
page) and contain a brief introduction and conclusion. Make certain that your introduction includes your revised thesis statement, one to two sentences that identify your big idea, the problem the big idea will address, and why your solution/idea should be implemented. You will also have cohesive body paragraphs that provide a specific, focused analysis of your main points supported by the sources you found during the research process.

You must include at least three sources
in this draft (in the text itself, not simply in the references page), one of which must be an academic source from Kaplan’s Library. Your sources, of course, must include in-text citations in the body of the paper as well as full citations in the references page following the APA format. If you do not include the appropriate citations, your paper will be considered plagiarized.

In addition to at least three pages of text, you must also include both a title page
and references. These pages are in addition to, not included in, the three to five required pages. You can view models of APA formatted essays in the Writing Center’s reading,

Sample APA Research Paper

, and unit 4 includes links to numerous Writing Center resources on citation style.

Submitting your Project

Put your project in a Word document. Save it in a location and with a name that you will remember. When you are ready to submit it, go to the Dropbox, located in the tab above next to DocSharing, and complete the steps below:

• Click the link that says ‘Submit an Assignment’.
• In the ‘Submit to Basket’ menu, select Unit 6: Dropbox.
• In the ‘Comments’ field, make sure to add at least the title of your paper.
• Click the ‘Add Attachments’ button.
• Follow the steps listed to attach your Word document.
• To view your graded work, come back to the Dropbox or go to the Gradebook after your instructor has evaluated it.
• Make sure that you save a copy of your submitted assignment.

The Provisional Pitch for My Big Idea

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The Provisional Pitch for My Big Idea

Yasmine Bryant

Kaplan University

The Provisional Pitch for My Big Idea

Community centers are essential in underprivileged neighborhoods because they provide a safe environment for children to go to once released from school and before their parents leave work. They allow children who come from disadvantage homes to learn and be provided the same opportunities that fortunate children receive.

My revised thesis statement provides more concise information rather than it being formatted as a research statement. This will be more effective than the original statement I had because I believe that it is important to get the main point across in a persuasive essay as soon as possible. Although I do feel that my other thesis was a good starting point, I feel this thesis encompasses the main purpose for the community center and the most important positive effects that this will have on the community without going into too much detail.

The research strategy that I have chosen is to use the Kaplan library to find statistics and articles talking about children who come from single parent homes or dual parent homes where both parents work, and how they are left with no one to care for them until their parents come home. I think it will be important to emphasis on the types of activities that these children get in to while their parents are working and they have no supervision. Additionally I think it will be important to mention how the parents of these children do not have the financially stability to afford sending them to after school care without assistance so in the interim they send the children home by themselves. I think it would be important for me to research any New York City not-for-profit agencies that are already established in similar programs that I am trying to start. That would help provide bonding for my idea and show how the result shave been positive. I also think that it would be very important for me to ensure to get research that also goes against what I am trying to do. Today, many people do not feel that their tax dollars should go toward supporting people who have the ability to take care of themselves or make changes in their lives that would put them and their families in better situations.

Imagine that you are 13 years old and you were just released from school. It’s 3pm and you will arrive home by 3:15pm by yourself (you were instructed to go straight home by your parent(s)). You may be an older sibling, younger sibling, or any only child – regardless there is no adult supervision. There’s no one to make you an afternoon snack, no one to help you with your homework, no one to ask you about your day. Since there is nothing to do in the house, you decide to go outside and find something to do. You happen to live in Fort Greene Housing Development, in downtown Brooklyn. This neighborhood is drug infested, people get killed on a weekly basis, and the gang population is heavy. Now on the other hand look at the life of this same child/children who is released from school at 3pm; walks outside to find his or her adult mentor waiting there for him or her to walk them to the afterschool program at the community center; helps you with your homework and talks with you; you get positive interaction with other children; your parent arrives to pick you up from this facility and you go home with your parent. The second half of my statement is what we would hope every child is receiving but this is not the case. These children who are continuously being left in positions to care for themselves are learning bad habits and turning into troubled young adults. No matter the child, all children are our future and they don’t ask to be in their present situations. Please assist me in ensuring that every child has fresh start to their lives.