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 Please review two ESL students’ writing sample and grade them using either a holistic or an analytic scoring rubric. You need to create your own scoring rubric.

writing class in an intensive college preparatory program. The prompt was to
write’about something memorable. As you read these stories,’ try to be aware of I

Iyour own reactions to the text. What features of the writing do you find annoy-
ing~ Clear? Conuincingi Would you say that either Composition is’better than
the other, in your. uieto of what constitutes effeetive ~riiing? ‘ ‘. .

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Composition} was written by a native speaker of Japanese. Composition 2
was written. by someone who was raised in Japan, but who wasnot ethnically
japanese.The two authors.were studentsin the’same ESL claSs ~ California .

. Composition 1

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:ThiS is very shQ.meFllle~perienc..eto me.
– i. ‘ Wh e ~ I ‘Visit ed to KOREA f irst ‘time in [92’0. .

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I took a: ta~i from airport , It was rainny night ano :r:-e(llly hard +0
~Ollght . the ta~i. · Beeuuse there ~re ~o many people a+ the. airport.

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.’\; At .last) I c..Ollght the t~l<.i aHer I waite.daboirt ,4-0 minutes. Then the '. . ,ta ~ i was begin +0 rlln.

‘: AHe~ ‘drove about 5 minut~s the driver went to other way that was- . . . -‘ (
made me feel some’ Fear.

‘: I asked .him W why yOll going this way?n , . .

Hi said~Oh/ don’t w~rry th is is a shodt.v+!!n “. “;’

:.: A Her ~: littl~ while he ~ad~ s+~p’ at:.ar: and h~ said ~ l th;nk th er~ is
.~ome troble . With engine.

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. He said “‘I’m s~rry but I needy~~r he\p. Wholld ‘ yov · pllsh myc..ar ?n

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I added all of my power and pllsh the car.

Then he has gone. · ~ e. s . he steal my all of stuFFs: And I never Find my
s+llFF again.

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I was really sad) blft I c..ollidn’t tell any my Japanese hiends, Bec..avse
I am KOREAN , .